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C/R |
Comment |
Date |
Image |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Hi Jose. Really appreciate your assessment of this composition in both its technical and aesthetic parameters.
Yes, in future versions the white line will be pronounced in the extended areas.
LAL |
Sep 29th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Jane, I must comment again: the use of a lot of space in this composition is effective to me - I love the use of "space" to assist in constructing a narrative , and this piece is a good example of these dynamics.
Jane, as you confessed about creating a dramatic scene - a 'strong and heavy mood', I immediately feel this in the composition. The more I study it, the more I begin to reflect on family vacations we often enjoy near Panama city, Florida.
Of course, we must all realize, for as many viewers a piece of art receives, we may also have as many interpretations. |
Sep 11th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Reply |
Nice lens. Can't wait to see your work, Judy. |
Sep 11th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Yes, Tripod perfect for this type of shot - great choice of equipment and subject: I like the cropped (macro) composition, and is a great step towards making images like this more often as a special project. Just a thought.
But, as some of us have pointed out, in this case, the original composition seems balanced, and I love the bokeh (the softness)of the green leaves! Next time, also try (perhaps with a different type of flower) opening up the lens to create a lot more (or severe) bokeh. Tripod a must and remote triggering recommended - both which you are already familiar with. F/1.4 or 1.8 50mm lens is a good choice, and of course, a Macro lens, too. Happy shooting!
A delightfully relaxing photograph. Love it! |
Sep 11th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Reply |
Hey, Georgianne - yes, good points: I too, went to the thin line dividing the water and the mainland to lighten it up some - it could be a bit more pronounced, indeed.
And agree, a bit more detail could have benefited the composition, though keep in mind I was looking at this specific composition from an abstract point of view - and maybe I overplayed the "mystery" aspect.
However, under gallery spotlights, it looks a bit more revealing than on screen, in any case, I will look and find the original later this week and apply your suggestions. :) |
Sep 11th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Let me add - the high resolution version on my screen and in print reveal more detail, but at least you get an overall presentation. Thank you. :) |
Sep 10th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Gee! First, I really like this composition....very engaging and creates quite the narrative. Love it! Some comments:
You may have used a larger aperture and then be sure you focused at the center: this would have (Maybe) added bokeh to the foreground while speeding up the shutter to stop motion: and this is another interesting item - at 1/15 sec it still appears the people on the beach are clear and detailed - that's really amazing at such a super slow shutter speed. Very puzzling. Also, two artifacts creep into the right-side frame: perhaps next time change your position to avoid the issue - otherwise, great moment to "eliminate" the distractions in post-production. :)
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Sep 10th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Georgianne - yes, this is a more subtle presentation, indeed. Of course, the difference in the BW Tone makes a big difference as well: previously, toning was very cool, and with high contrast can elicit a loud appearance I spoke about before, but this, more warmer tone, helps immediately, in my opinion.
Perhaps some of the previous "presets" had extra "structure" built into them, but this new version posted, like Jose commented, is is more pleasant.
By now I am sure you know how I was using the term "confusion". As the lines, shapes and colors (or black and white scale)seem to become lost within the field of view - and this is sometimes the result of too heavy a hand in post-production.
In the future, perhaps you can try to work out both luminance & chromatic corrections/changes not using any or fewer presets. We can discuss this more later. :) |
Sep 10th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Reply |
Awesome! |
Sep 10th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Jose - love it!
Composition immediately defines the space - as it relates to location, weather, thus creating a "mood" the subjects were enjoying.
In my opinion, the anchor, if you will, that develops the Whole is the young women that seemingly is being led by her balloons, while in the near-field, we have a sampling of perhaps one, two or maybe three personalities to help the viewer conjure a narrative. Terrific!
I must ask - was the "Girl with the Balloons" asked to walk across the scene for you? Thank you. :)
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Sep 9th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Another amazing composition! Very striking. I was first sad to see the background mountains washed out - but in this version the blowout highlights work well and create a dramatic visual scene.
Question, have you tried a version that keeps the distance hillside intact? If yes, did it work, too?
Again, lovely piece. :) |
Sep 9th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Hi Georgianne. First, I really like the composition. I see the car has been dispensed with - good.
Allow me a few moments to offer an alternative post-production edit:
In the color version it is easy to enjoy all the different colors as they pop out with their individual hues that effectively define the composition; I guess the color version is pretty much as seen through the viewfinder, yes?
In my opinion, your use of all these "presets" has caused what I sometimes refer to as, confusion along the bandwidth or color-scale (and in BW, grey-scale). In my opinion, and I see this as a common trend, the extensive use of "structure" is causing color-scale or grey-scale confusion. On its own, your final piece is very attractive and inviting, but maybe, also too loud. I prefer less contrast between the shades and I feel you will see the BW rendering offer more subtle tones as a result.
At the very least, surely, food for thought. :) |
Sep 9th |
| 83 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Absolutely terrific work, Judy.
I must say, however, though you successfully accomplished the task of cropping (and extreme editing) to create this lovely composition, I really prefer the original Crop. I feel the surrounding out of focus fabric or petals add to the overall piece, in my opinion. Actually, what is the background? Thank you, Judy.
LAL |
Sep 9th |
10 comments - 3 replies for Group 83
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| 87 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Hi Graham. I agree the blur in the foreground can be unsettling: On an alternative note - the less-blur in the background balances out the scene (ever so slightly) and frames the subject in clarity.
This said, I still feel it has a unique quality, if for no other reason to present the possibilities of experimenting with different lenses and aperture settings.
LAL |
Sep 29th |
| 87 |
Sep 19 |
Comment |
Hi Jennifer - really appreciate your kind words.
One of the many attributes to creating better compositions is the use of "space" - (I actually have an article about the subject that has already been sent to the publisher - the piece will be published soon). The image above has two attributes to help form a narrative 1. the subject is biased to one side so the viewer develops a sense of the location: size, environmental conditions and 2. creating a special long and narrow crop to suggest the animals are moving towards something or somewhere. The two attributes together (in this case) suggest to the viewer to look both left and right side of the composition helping them to create a narrative or story of what is happening at the moment. The interpretation is up to the individual at this point.
These two attributes are used by better TV and movie Directors and their "Directors of Photography" to enhance an otherwise static scene into a more fine art alternative. This has become even more important the past 12 years as home TV screens have been using the 16:9 aspect ratio, for example.
LAL |
Sep 9th |
2 comments - 0 replies for Group 87
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12 comments - 3 replies Total
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